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| Mariposa79 |
 Posted: Mon Nov 07, 2005 6:41 pm Post subject: |
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| Syera wrote: |
| Nope. I saw your posted snippet. |
Well you can't critique something if you don't know the whole story. Right?
Come on. Read it. PLEEEASSEE! |
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| Syera |
| Posted: Mon Nov 07, 2005 6:34 pm Post subject: |
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| Nope. I saw your posted snippet. |
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| Mariposa79 |
| Posted: Mon Nov 07, 2005 6:33 pm Post subject: |
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| Syera wrote: |
Now they're too big. A width of 500 would've sufficed. Oh, well. 
I say... he looks a tad crosseyed in that black-and-white picture. Heh... silly boy must have a real thing against artists and photographers, eh?
Only quibble I have is that the characters in your story seem a little out of character. Oh, well. Rajan's pretty nice-lookin', mm-hmm. |
Oh yeah, he makes funny faces when the artists comes around to do with picture for the royal painting. That or a tiny little nat flew on his nose because the artist told him not to move.
Quibble? You've read my story ? or That's what you got so far that's posted here? I put incerpts from my story here. So I can get people to come to the Library to read my stuff. Little bits and pieces of it seem to be out of charcter but the whole story explains it. |
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| Syera |
| Posted: Mon Nov 07, 2005 6:15 pm Post subject: |
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Now they're too big. A width of 500 would've sufficed. Oh, well.
I say... he looks a tad crosseyed in that black-and-white picture. Heh... silly boy must have a real thing against artists and photographers, eh?
Only quibble I have is that the characters in your story seem a little out of character. Oh, well. Rajan's pretty nice-lookin', mm-hmm. |
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| Mariposa79 |
| Posted: Mon Nov 07, 2005 5:53 pm Post subject: |
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Here's a better pic of Rajan too.
Thank you Adiba for everything! We'll talk more ! |
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| Mariposa79 |
| Posted: Mon Nov 07, 2005 5:50 pm Post subject: |
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Lol. oh okay. I'll make it bigger. 
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| Syera |
| Posted: Mon Nov 07, 2005 3:06 pm Post subject: |
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| Argh. Any chance you could make those bigger? They're so TINY! |
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| Mariposa79 |
| Posted: Mon Nov 07, 2005 12:28 pm Post subject: |
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Genie magically zapped into some music from his DJ turn table. The partygoers was amused by the contraption that played out music. They came out to dance on the floor. Rajan asked permission if it was okay to dance with Jasmine. Aladdin allowed it. Rajan took her hand and danced with her. He was quite a good dancer. He twirled her around and swung her. Jasmine followed his every move. Rajan dipped her, Jasmine smiled as she was put back up. Rajan squirmed closer to Jasmine.
Rajan looked at Aladdin. Aladdin was steaming in jealousy. " Jasmine. I think your husband must be mad because there's steam coming out of his ears. Boy! Is his face is red."
Aladdin went up to Jasmine, " May I cut in Rajan?" Rajan gave Jasmine back to Aladdin. " Aren't you cozying up a little too close to Rajan?"
Jasmine was shocked to see a jealous side in Aladdin, " We were just dancing. My love. Nothing more."
" He's been by your side all night and didn't talk to anybody else but you. I think that he's trying to break us apart." Aladdin said it in such suspicion.
" What? Aladdin! What is wrong with you? Why are you being this way? Prince Rajan was nice to you and this is how your treat your guests ?" Jasmine snapped at him.
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| AladdinsGenie |
| Posted: Sun Nov 06, 2005 1:59 pm Post subject: |
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| Mariposa79 |
| Posted: Sun Nov 06, 2005 11:25 am Post subject: |
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| Anybody want to see more pics from my Come What May fanfic? |
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| persian85033 |
| Posted: Fri Nov 04, 2005 2:40 pm Post subject: |
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| Well, maybe he was ill. He must've come down with something. |
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| Mariposa79 |
| Posted: Thu Nov 03, 2005 8:54 pm Post subject: |
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| persian85033 wrote: |
| I just thought because it was night, and then probably because he needed to go out into the sun a little more. He did look like he hadn't seen sunlight in ages. |
But yet, Saluk goes ramsacking and looking for the Oracle in the Sun with Cassim |
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| persian85033 |
| Posted: Thu Nov 03, 2005 6:31 pm Post subject: |
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| I just thought because it was night, and then probably because he needed to go out into the sun a little more. He did look like he hadn't seen sunlight in ages. |
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| AladdinsGenie |
| Posted: Thu Nov 03, 2005 6:14 pm Post subject: |
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No
She is referring to his change in skin tone. She is saying they ran out of a flesh tone and just used gray |
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| persian85033 |
| Posted: Thu Nov 03, 2005 6:00 pm Post subject: |
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Saluk had blue eyes?  |
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