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IRideAladdin'sCarpet · Posted: Sat Sep 03, 2005 9:28 pm Post subject:

*turns off personal protective shield, and grabs food and eats crazily*
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*stops eating, wipes crumbs from outfit and face. stands up straight and plucks out tranquilizer and throws it back, striking nez in the face. tackles syera, frees mozy from her (syera's) bonds, and takes him away in victory*
Laughing

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Mariposa79 · Posted: Tue Sep 06, 2005 1:03 pm Post subject:

STOP IT ALL OF YOU!

You're not helping me!

Syera · Posted: Tue Sep 06, 2005 2:39 pm Post subject:

Well, I'd say it's a sabre that could cut your arm off if anybody got around to sharpening it. Still, even though the blade's dull, it could probably impale somebody pretty well, though. I will say this, though... that blade ain't stainless steel... nuh-uh.

Mariposa79 · Posted: Tue Sep 06, 2005 5:16 pm Post subject:

Nez · Posted: Tue Sep 06, 2005 8:56 pm Post subject:

Mariposa79 · Posted: Mon Sep 26, 2005 12:09 pm Post subject:

Okay, I thought of something. Should I write my next fanfic in a form of a script and soundtrack into it ?

IRideAladdin'sCarpet · Posted: Mon Sep 26, 2005 5:55 pm Post subject:

you mean like, have lyrics in the story? ick no. i hate those! write one about romeo and juliet! with al and the gang! i could finish those piccerooooos for ya! ^_^
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Syera · Posted: Mon Sep 26, 2005 6:47 pm Post subject:

Absolutely not. Script-fics are just plain annoying.

As for song lyrics, those don't usually work out to well in written stories, either. You cannot convey the tunes, and without tunes it's just a poem. When you insert a poem into your story, you pretty much have to bring the story to a screeching halt whilst the reader reads your song/poem, which is not a good thing. Alternatively, if you try to intersperse actions in the lyrics, you end up with a mess that's just too wordy. (Just imagine trying to put the Friend Like Me sequence into written format without losing anything. You just can't do it without making it too clunky for the reader.)
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Nez · Posted: Mon Sep 26, 2005 6:48 pm Post subject:

Mariposa79 · Posted: Tue Sep 27, 2005 12:08 pm Post subject:

What I mean by putting songs is not writing the lyircs into them like have a soundtrack. I know that's too much work but if someone has lime wire, or napster or apple or ipod. They can get a grip of the mood that is set into or the feeling of the scenario. It would put my fanfic a interactive story. I just want to try something different to flourish me as a writer and do different types of writing.

But how's script writing can be annoying?

like ?

For example :

Aladdin and Jasmine were horseplaying on the beach. It was a beautiful day, the beautiful golden rays of the sun beated down on them, and the waves crashed in and out as it touched their feet. Aladdin gave Jasmine a piggyback ride and ran. They both smiled and Jasmine laughed hysterically and holding onto him tightly. Suddenly, Aladdin stopped and he had a change of face. Jasmine lifted her head and saw what Aladdin saw. He let Jasmine down.
There were two men all dressed in black looking and pointing at them from the little hill above.

Jasmine: ( with surprise) They found us.

The men in black started to move towards them.

Aladdin: (grabs Jasmine's hand) Let's go! (runs. He quickly scans for a possible escape, and all he sees is a boat a little off the pier and not to far off sea. They run towards the pier. He looks back and the men was trailing behind.)

Jasmine : (feels like a ragdoll being swung around by a little child) Where are we going ?

Aladdin : We are going to swim to that boat. ( he points to the boat.)

Jasmine: (starts to doubt) I don't know about this. I never swam at a such distance and the waves ?.

Aladdin : Trust me. (They ran to the end of the pier. The jump was a story high.)

or like this..

Jasmine: Hey
Aladdin: Hey
Jasmine: What are you doing?
Aladdin: Sleeping.

Syera · Posted: Tue Sep 27, 2005 4:17 pm Post subject:

Because it's clunky. Seeing "NAME: (line description) line here" tends to pull you from the mystique of the story. (Which, on a sidenote, is why writing Genie can be so darned difficult - tell someone they're looking at Captain Picard, and you're going to make people realize that they're reading the story as opposed to being there.)

Compare the difference...

Aladdin brushed a stray hair from his face and beat a tattoo on the marble floor with his foot. "Why aren't they here yet?"

Jasmine glanced out the window. Several horsemen waited below; their horses stamping their feet impatiently. "They are here."

Aladdin (brushing a stray hair out of his face and tapping a tattoo on the marble floor with his foot)
Why aren't they here yet?

Jasmine (looking out the window and seeing several horsemen on impatient-looking horses)
They are here.
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Mariposa79 · Posted: Wed Sep 28, 2005 11:58 am Post subject:

OH.

I see. Okay.