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PostPosted: Wed Sep 06, 2006 2:23 pm    Post subject: Major Mary-Sue Test Update Reply with quote

Awhile back, some people were complaining because it wasn't exactly clear on my test what kind of questions should qualify for what kind of characters. I've arranged the questions in a new system that I hope will make it clearer.

It's fixed up to be more original-character friendly - yes, you'll be able to test John Sheppard and get (what I hope are) more accurate results. Very Happy

http://www.springhole.net/quizzes/marysue.htm

What do you think? Any suggestions?
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PostPosted: Wed Sep 06, 2006 7:27 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Good test! I think I got lower than 50+, but I guess my character is still a mary sue Sad but still a good test!
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PostPosted: Wed Sep 06, 2006 8:59 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

You did read the instructions carefully, right? At least one person was getting scores through the roof because he wasn't using the test correctly. After using it properly, his score went down from 49 to 13.
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PostPosted: Thu Sep 07, 2006 1:48 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

in that case...I better do it again!
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PostPosted: Sun Sep 10, 2006 3:05 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

I have a question. Does making a character really ugly give them potential to be a sue/stu? I mean, if the author keeps referring to this, or if it's used as one of this character's sympathetic "flaws"?
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PostPosted: Sun Sep 10, 2006 3:30 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

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I have a question. Does making a character really ugly give them potential to be a sue/stu? I mean, if the author keeps referring to this, or if it's used as one of this character's sympathetic "flaws"?
Could be, it depends how it's used. There was one where the girl had a scar on her face and angsted about this a lot and ended up saving Agrabah. She was definitely a Sue. Laughing
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PostPosted: Sun Sep 10, 2006 3:35 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

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I have a question. Does making a character really ugly give them potential to be a sue/stu? I mean, if the author keeps referring to this, or if it's used as one of this character's sympathetic "flaws"?


Having never seen any really ugly protagonists, I'm not too sure. However, I have seen cases where an author goes through hoops to tell the readers how plain and blah the character is, and it's just as groan-inducing as the 'traditional' purple-prosed Mary Sue descriptions.

Overdoing any sympathetic flaw gives a character the potential for Suedom. There's nothing wrong with them in and of themselves, but the writer needs to make sure he or she isn't making the story sound like a pity-party for their character, if that makes sense.
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PostPosted: Sun Sep 10, 2006 4:52 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

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I have a question. Does making a character really ugly give them potential to be a sue/stu? I mean, if the author keeps referring to this, or if it's used as one of this character's sympathetic "flaws"?


Well, if your story started like this:

'*Name* was a *kind of person* who lived in Agrabah, and she was so hideous that no one ever wanted anything to do with her...'

And some of your dialogue went like this:

'"Get out of here, you disgusting thing," *MinorAntagonist* spat, shoving *Name* into the dirt. "You're such a hideous freak, no one wants you around."'

'"You think I'm hideous, don't you?" *Name* moaned. "Everyone does! It pains you to look at my face, doesn't it?"

"No, I don't think you're ugly," *CanonProtagonist* fibbed, trying to make *Name* feel better.'

'"What have we here?" *CanonAntagonist* crowed. "What a pathetically hideous little creature. What reason would a boy like Aladdin to keep such revolting company?"'

Then that would count as a Sue-like trait.
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PostPosted: Sun Sep 10, 2006 5:35 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Laughing

I actually haven't made any characters for anything yet. I was thinking of tackling it one day (not any time soon) but I wanted to be sure I did my research before making a story.

There is the danger of overdoing anything, even if it's overdoing the character's beauty/ugliness/plainess. How do you keep from making the story blah if you want to make your character an ordinary, average person?

I'm glad that you mentioned that the things listed were symptoms, not the disease, Syera. I've seen authors' characters be accused of being Sues/Stus even though I felt the charcters weren't that at all. And usually the argument is, "They're pretty, well-liked and have good sense of morals!" Yes, these things *could* make a stu/sue but they aren't the only things. And the argument that the main character is the center of the universe could also be good evidence to sueish-ness, but most main charcters are supposed to be the main focus.

All this is very tricky and really confusing, but hopefully I'll get the hang of it because I want to write a good story one day with good characters. Very Happy

Thanks for creating this test. I've seen other Mary Sue Tests online but this one was the most accurate and helpful. Smile
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PostPosted: Sun Sep 10, 2006 8:44 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

APK wrote:
There is the danger of overdoing anything, even if it's overdoing the character's beauty/ugliness/plainess. How do you keep from making the story blah if you want to make your character an ordinary, average person?


'Tis simple. Average doesn't automatically equate to 'blah.' Everyone's had some rotten times in their life. Everyone has things they enjoy doing. Everyone has quirks and oddities about them.

Still, there's nothing wrong with giving your character a little extra here and there, so long as you don't overdo it. You can take a plain cake batter (which would taste fine as-is) and make it into a spice-cake by adding the right spices. However, if you overdo the spices or put in the wrong spices, it's just icky.

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I'm glad that you mentioned that the things listed were symptoms, not the disease, Syera. I've seen authors' characters be accused of being Sues/Stus even though I felt the charcters weren't that at all. And usually the argument is, "They're pretty, well-liked and have good sense of morals!" Yes, these things *could* make a stu/sue but they aren't the only things.

True.

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And the argument that the main character is the center of the universe could also be good evidence to sueish-ness, but most main charcters are supposed to be the main focus.

True. And for a standalone book or movie, it's probably fine.

However, if you're doing a series of any kind, it can be detrimental to continually focus on and 'spoil' one character. It can stifle potential storylines, plus it can make the reader feel resentful. Let's say your character prefers a... oh, geeky scientist to the hero. (It happens.) This reader is going to want to see the scientist get out and get a little action. If you keep focusing on the 'hero' character of the story, this reader is going to get bored, irritated, and quite possibly resentful.

One example that immediately comes to mind is Sailor Moon. Out of five young women, only one gets true love at the end of the story. The other four? Far as I can tell, their only duty is to act as the personal protectors of the spoiled brat I mentioned. This is hardly fair to the readers who identify themselves with the other characters of the story.
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PostPosted: Sun Sep 10, 2006 9:15 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Well, see, to my way of thinking, "average" and "ordinary" are not mutually inclusive. It's hard to be "ordinary" and "interesting" -- in fact, the words by nature contradict -- but "average" and "interesting" can be made to work.

The most important thing to remember where character creation is concerned is a simple mantra, "Story Is King". Yep, story plays a lot into your character. It might be said that the characters and story have a symbiotic relationship, and when done properly the story will unfold in such a way that any other person would not have been able to do it. Not in terms of abilities, means or station, but by your character's personality, philosophy and idiosyncracies.

For example, two stories I'm working on at the moment have quite different stories, but very similar lead roles.

Colin (surname unknown) is a blonde teenage boy who enjoys the skateboard and cannot stand Shakespeare. One particularily hot day, he discovers that there is absolutely nothing for him to do, so he caves to the nagging of his parents and does an online job-search. Shortly after that, he falls asleep and, via the high-tech internet system, accidentally swaps his brain with the neural programming of a robot halfway across the planet.

Crane McAlpin is a blonde teenage boy with a fondness for guitar and a general disliking of the ocean. While on vacation on a Caribbean island, he boredly wanders away from a large celebration and is kidnapped by pirates.

On the surface, these two characters (indeed, roles) seem fairly interchangeable, but during the actual writing process Colin and Crane have developed into very different characters, and in fact as I wrote their personalities and opinions into the story I began to realize that one of them wouldn't have allowed himself to fall into the other's situation.

So how do you develop a character like that?

I mentioned earlier that Story is King, but the funny thing about it is that Character is King, too. It's a symbiotic relationship. While you're advancing the plot, you need to include your character's opinion on the situation and the world at large. This can be reflected in your character's thoughts, speech, actions and even your writing style. (I recommend reading some Dave Barry as an example of how someone can view things.) In fact, if the story begins to get slow it can often help to switch focus. "Okay, I'm bored," said Plot. "Character, it's your turn." And while doing this, your character starts - gasp - developing. And, of course, character development is what takes you from "blah" to "interesting".

The reason it's important for your character to fit the plot is for your character consistency. For example, I've been trying to write a story in which I, just as I am, find a device that opens a portal to another world, and follow that portal there. The entire story's been stalled for some time simply because I am much too big of a coward to go through a portal of unknown origin of my own volition.

By the way, if you have an idea of what you want your character to be, do yourself a favor and don't write a character sheet. Don't try to describe your character's personality, likes, dislikes, skills, etc. in minute detail before you start. As your character moves through the story, it will be essential at certain points to reveal certain things, and then you make sure that you only include what you need to.

So, in essence, Plot and Character are two entities which, when created and used in tandem, will serve to keep each other interesting as long as you don't get actual writer's block. Don't worry too hard, and write what you feel. Editing is your friend; once your character develops further, you may wish to go back and alter or even rewrite his or her role. This is probably a more in-depth lecture than you were really after, but hopefully it was helpful somehow.
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PostPosted: Sun Sep 10, 2006 9:42 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Although Janette's advice is good overall, I will say it's a little more suited to original fiction than to fan fiction.

With fan fiction, one must also be careful not to let the fan character become shinier than the canon character, nor let the fan character encroach upon a canon character's territory. (EG, rendering a canon character potentially useless to the plot.)

One thing a fan author should NEVER overlook is considering whether another character would be qualified to fill the spot of the fan character. If the same plot could just as easily be carried out without the fan character, then it's pretty likely that you should drop the character and fill in with canon characters or redesign the character and/or plot so this character is necessary. (No, opening an enchanted door with a magical pendant doesn't count. )

Like Janette said, the story and plot has a symbiotic relationship. This is also true of fan characters. However, if an author isn't careful, he/she may end up with an infective/destructive organism rather than a symbiote.

And yes, Janette is right about Dave Barry. I don't know if you'd enjoy him, but we find that he often provides a unique (and hilarious) perspective on life. Smile
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PostPosted: Sun Sep 10, 2006 10:08 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

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"One example that immediately comes to mind is Sailor Moon. Out of five young women, only one gets true love at the end of the story. The other four? Far as I can tell, their only duty is to act as the personal protectors of the spoiled brat I mentioned. This is hardly fair to the readers who identify themselves with the other characters of the story."


Laughing I never really liked Serena/Usagi either. I liked the show in general and the other characters Laughing

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"Colin (surname unknown) is a blonde teenage boy who enjoys the skateboard and cannot stand Shakespeare. One particularily hot day, he discovers that there is absolutely nothing for him to do, so he caves to the nagging of his parents and does an online job-search. Shortly after that, he falls asleep and, via the high-tech internet system, accidentally swaps his brain with the neural programming of a robot halfway across the planet."


That last sentence threw me off a bit Laughing I see what you mean with the average/interesting thing.

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"While on vacation on a Caribbean island, he boredly wanders away from a large celebration and is kidnapped by pirates."


Oh, how I wish that would happen to me! Laughing And you can all just guess who the pirate would be Wink

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"By the way, if you have an idea of what you want your character to be, do yourself a favor and don't write a character sheet. Don't try to describe your character's personality, likes, dislikes, skills, etc. in minute detail before you start. As your character moves through the story, it will be essential at certain points to reveal certain things, and then you make sure that you only include what you need to."


I somewhat understand what you mean, but at the same time, I just thought of how authors like JK Rowling claimed to have outlined in detail before writing their books. I thought this was brilliant and could be really useful, since they would have no problem getting stuck in certain places. Then again, if any of you Harry Potter fans have read the 6th book and disliked it (not because of the ending but all the stuff in betwen) then maybe (like me) you have come to think that her outlining worked out great until the 6th book.

Uh...I don't know how to explain well but I felt that the 6th book was just so different from her style for the other books. I don't mean in vocabulary, since everyone seems to think the vocabulary has gotten complicated in the 6th book. I meant that the Gin/Har thing was so rushed, pretty flimsy, underdeveloped and kind of cheesy. Not that I dislike the pairing itself. And don't even get me started on how nothing happened with the plot except shippy fluffness and snogging sessions. Rolling Eyes

If you're not an HP reader, then I'm sorry for confusing you with all of that Laughing

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"This is probably a more in-depth lecture than you were really after, but hopefully it was helpful somehow."


Oh, don't worry. I appreciate all the help. Smile Besides, I've made many long posts before so I don't mind reading long posts.

Thanks for all your help, guys. Smile I was thinking of outlining for a story that was in my head for a while but I think I'll just outline some of the universe and plot instead of the characters. I've done short stories before but I want to learn how to write more than short stories.
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PostPosted: Sun Sep 10, 2006 10:42 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Outlining is fine. What Janette means is do yourself a favor and don't try to come up with everything there is to know about your character beforehand. Just let the character grow alongside the story. Chances're good you can come up with required information on a need-to-know basis. Wink
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PostPosted: Sun Sep 10, 2006 10:54 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

APK wrote:
Oh, how I wish that would happen to me! Laughing And you can all just guess who the pirate would be Wink

I don't think you'd care much for Captain Geoffrey Slagg. Wink

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I somewhat understand what you mean, but at the same time, I just thought of how authors like JK Rowling claimed to have outlined in detail before writing their books. I thought this was brilliant and could be really useful, since they would have no problem getting stuck in certain places

Writing an outline for your plot is useful. I just find that when I determine rules for characters straight away it tends to limit what I can let the characters get away with later on, and it's not conducive to my creative atmosphere. Instead, I prefer to choose a character theme - for Colin, it was "bored" - and let the character's personality develop around their reaction to the situation.
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